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ARC's avatar

wow the way this unravels is wild and original. A daring blend of grief, time distortion, and metafiction, this story is dope and defiantly original.

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

I second this emotion.

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P.K. Anthony's avatar

Goddamn, that swerve hit my brain like a Tokyo drift my car was not tuned to take. I’m all bent out of shape in the best way.

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Ashley T.K.'s avatar

Handling on the brain can be pretty difficult. Is yours automatic or stick?

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P.K. Anthony's avatar

I dunno, what kind of gearbox is in those old red-and-yellow Little Tikes scooty-cars?

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

The last scintilla of brain synapse longing to make sense of the unknowable Next. Not insanity-- clarity. Maybe prescience, maybe projection. The desire for meaning to the last half-breath.

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Ashley T.K.'s avatar

I love it! So much poetry to your words

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Lyndsey Resnick's avatar

I tried to answer the challenge. Thank you.

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Stephen Duffy's avatar

I don't really know what to say to that, Ashley!

I always tell myself that I can write whatever the fuck I want, but this story has reinforced that idea to infinty (and beyond) ❤️🌌

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Ashley T.K.'s avatar

That's fantastic news! The best stories inspire others

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Nick Winney's avatar

Fuck your brilliant story and its family.

to quote some dude.🙄

i dont need this competition in my brain. i can never win it!. curse you!

Jeez. that's like being sucked into a screen and then made to watch yourself watching yourself ... and there's like a delay where the thoughts you think play out on your face and you can see them before AND after you think them... and it goes round forever as your fuck your own mind up.

Back slappingly good work. Not seen anything quite like that.

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Ashley T.K.'s avatar

Wow, that's a seriously heavy endorsement. Thank you so much for the kind words and doubly so for reading! It's incredible to see the way this one impacts the people who read it

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Nick Winney's avatar

the way you changed it up...then it was like a giant finger jabbing at me and a voice yelling...WHAT YOU GOING TO DO ABOUT THIS THEN...COME ON MUTHAFUKKKAAA!

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